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Title: Ancient, Wobbly and Crippled
Authors: [livejournal.com profile] speaky_bean
Characters: Near, L
Rating: PG-13
Word Count: 571
Notes: I’ve never written anything from Near’s POV before, so I hope it doesn’t come out too badly. It’s about Near’s view of the timing of L’s death—perhaps it really was best that L never grow old. Note that Near's views about old age do not necessarily reflect my own! Written for week #73 at [livejournal.com profile] dn_contest, for the prompt "old age".

Near rarely pays heed to his appearance, but today Gevanni is complaining of his first grey hair. This makes Near wonder if perhaps he’s showing signs of age as well.

It’s a silly thing to expect. At age four Near was frequently mistaken for an infant, and at age nineteen he had the short limbs and rounded belly of a child. Now, closing in on age twenty-four, he finally looks as though he’s hit puberty. Such retarded growth is unlikely to produce grey hairs or wrinkled skin, but all the same, he’d like to see. He’s gone so long without looking in a mirror that he’s beginning to lose touch with himself.

As he expected, there are no crow’s feet marring his eyes, no silver threading his white-blonde hair. Near looks like a gangly preteen, a boy unlikely to say anything other then “whatever” or “dude”. He may never live long enough to look old. Which makes him not-so-very-different from the man he has been sculpting himself into for years. L never lived long enough to look old. Soon, Near is going to be older than he will ever be.

His mirror-self is hard-lined and acne-ridden, so he looks away, pads out of the bathroom and sits down on the linoleum floor with a thump. Near’s muscles are weak and won’t carry him for long. L’s muscles hadn’t been, L could kick a person in the face, L could sit balanced on the balls of his feet for hours. He had been strong where Near was weak, but which one of them found Kira? Which one of them is still alive?

Rubbing his pimply eye-lid in annoyance, Near wonders whether this means anything. Was L’s defeat a sign of impending decay? Was L losing his touch, was he growing old at twenty-five? Near doesn’t know much about L’s personal life, but he can’t imagine it was too different from his own. And though Near looks like a child, he feels older than the soil he can hardly remember sifting through as a child, gardening with his mother. That’s all he remembers of her, dirt and heat and nothing growing. Oh, and her organs splattered across the kitchen table and a lunatic telling him he’s next. Yes, Near is ancient, wobbly and crippled. But brilliant. Like L.

It is so much easier to think of that as wondrous now that L is gone. Near shudders to think of what could have become of him, had he lived to be old. He could have grown in a respectable, dignified gentleman like Mr. Wammy, but even that would be a devastating blow. Mr. Wammy, a world-renowned inventor, had become little more than Watari, L’s nursemaid, L’s portal to the outside world. He became nobody, and L, world-renowned detective, would have become nobody, too.

But this is the best-case scenario. The worst is for L to become a senile, toothless wretch with a plethora of health problems—the well-deserved diabetes and heart-disease, maybe cancer just because. Arthritis, shaking hands, a spine so deformed he should be living in a bell tower. The inability to understand or remember anything, his identity cannibalized by people like Near.

It would have been intolerable for L to grow old. And for the first time since he silently absorbed the shock of his passing, Near is glad that he died when he did.

Near might bow out early, too.

Date: 2009-08-27 02:51 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] daigranon.livejournal.com
Aw, this was short and sweet, I liked it. I like how you put compare mental to physical, how they are so different and yet can coexist inside one body. I miss writing for Death Note..

Great job!

Date: 2009-08-28 07:18 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] speaky-bean.livejournal.com
That's something that I'm very interested in exploring. A person's body has everything to do with who they are, but at the same time it has absolutely nothing to do with it, and so I'm really interested in exploring the intricacies of that concept.

You should try. Once you find time to write, try writing something for Death Note if you miss it. There's never any harm in trying, and you're a lovely writer, I'd be thrilled to see some work from you. ♥

Date: 2009-08-28 11:19 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] daigranon.livejournal.com
It's interesting to me as well. Keep writing for Near, I'd love to read!

*hugs* Aw, thanks so much. But now, I won't be able to write for a while, I think. School starts tomorrow.. -___-

Date: 2009-08-27 03:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kleine-aster.livejournal.com
Oh, this is great! I never thought of the fact that Near's physical growth might be actually stunted, but it makes sense. I thought you wrote him really well, the cold and rational line of thinking along with the little insecurities. I especially loved the comparisons between him and L and the thoughts on Mr. Wammy/Watari.

And for some reason, yes, I always imagine Near's parents as being murdered, too.

For some reason the acne was a nice touch. :D

Date: 2009-08-28 07:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] speaky-bean.livejournal.com
That was pretty much one of the first things I noticed about him--but that's fairly typical of me. He's very small, which is normal, but the fact that even in the bonus chapter, at age 23 or so, he looks like he's 13...? That says something to me. And he's almost never seen standing up, so I'm pretty sure there's something wrong with his leg muscles--even if it's only that they're weak because he hardly uses them, there's some problem there. And thanks, I'm glad you think I wrote him well...I've never really written from his perspective before, so I was kind of nervous.

There is no type of person who's parents are murdered, but it seems to me like his stunted emotions could have been brought on in part by a traumatic event. And while that could something else entirely, I just don't get that feeling. I get the feeling that Mello was abused, and I tend to write him that way. I have nothing consistent for the other orphans.

Hehe, everyone seems to like the acne. XD;

Date: 2009-08-27 11:30 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rinhail.livejournal.com
Even though it was hard to digest Near being 20+ years of age, I enjoyed it immensely.

And the acne was a nice touch. :)

Date: 2009-08-28 07:16 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] speaky-bean.livejournal.com
I wrote him at around the age he is in the extra chapter of Death Note--where we finally get to see him looking like he's hit puberty. A year or so older. It is hard to digest.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story, and thank you so much for your comment!

Date: 2009-08-28 12:02 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] versipellis.livejournal.com
Oh, very good - I really liked the use of the theme and all the different aspects of age used. Near also came across well - slightly arrogant and odd, but still readable ^^

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