http://peppermintwords.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] peppermintwords.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sunmoonandspoon 2008-06-06 07:00 pm (UTC)

It's a little difficult for me to see Mrs Yagami like this, but you made me feel sorry for L :P. I like present tense and how desperate L seems, going to the vending machine before having sex. Anyone's first time would be awkward so this is realistic. Sex scenes are tough to write, I guess, and realistic ones more so. Kudos and I like lollipops!

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